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Do you agree or disagree with the argument of have got to believe in yourself, even when no one else does. ? Write a short and well-organized essay in about 200 to 250 words to express your own argument(s) supported with relevant examples.

A lot of
people
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face
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difficulties
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 that
makes
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 them
to
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apply
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rely on
their self
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themself
themselves
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 and believe that they can handle
even
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it even
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 if nobody does. I personally agree with
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 statement and will explain the reasons throughout
this
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 essay. To rely on
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people
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 opinions and beliefs when we
face
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difficulties
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 is not a good option for
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ourself
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us
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. Many cases happen that show how someone's opinion can affect our life choices even if the one who
give
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 the words is
stranger
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a stranger
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 whom they do not understand
about
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apply
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our life.
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,
people
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 can easily judge our decision
that give
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 impact
to
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our self-esteem and
creating
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creates
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the
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a
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 lack of self-confidence to
make
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form
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 our opinion.
For instance
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,
people
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 with
low-confidence
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low confidence
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 after hearing a lot of bad comments about
theirself
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themselves
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 that
leads
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lead
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 them to fail in
overcome
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overcoming
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 their challenges.
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, Believing in
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ourself
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ourselves
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 is the key to
handle
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handling
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 all of the
difficulties
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. The only one who can solve our problem is
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ourself
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ourselves
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.
This
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 can lead us to be
critical
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a critical
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 person in order to have personal growth and success and
also
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 give
motivation
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us motivation
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 to
face
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 all the challenges that
seems
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seem
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 difficult.
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, the feeling of joy after
overcomes
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overcoming
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difficulties
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 is something that everyone should be experienced. For
the
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example, the
self beliefs
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self-beliefs
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 for winning a scholarship create good
afirmation
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affirmation
 for
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ourself
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ourselves
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 that
tend
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tends
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 to become a reality. In conclusion, the one who can overcome the challenges we
face
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 is
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ourself
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ourselves
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 even when
people
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 say we can not do it.
This
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 leads to
have
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having
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desire
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the desire
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of
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to
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 become
successfull
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successful
people
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 by having faith in
our self
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ourselves
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 when everyone
doubt
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doubts
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 us.

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coherence cohesion
Provide a clearer thesis statement in the introduction to clearly express your stance on the argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the argument, and transitions between paragraphs are smoother to improve the logical structure.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely and effectively.
grammatical range
Work on using a wider variety of complex sentence structures to demonstrate a more advanced level of grammar.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-confidence
  • self-esteem
  • positive mindset
  • resilience
  • persistence
  • determination
  • overcome challenges
  • achieving goals
  • skepticism
  • doubt
  • success
  • personal growth
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