The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned 

future development of the site

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and 

make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps illustrate the layout of Islip
town
centre
in present-day and how it will be developed in the future.
Overall
, there will be immense improvements, and the
town
centre
will undergo so much change, the most significant of which will be the transformation of the countryside and expansion of the main
road
. Today, there is a main
road
running through
west-east
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the west-east
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of the
town
centre
with shops
at
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in
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the middle alongside it.
In addition
, the main
road
has two sides, which the first one leads to the school southwest of the
town
centre
,
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and the other leads to the park in the southeast. There are
also
several residential located in the middle of the Islip
town
centre
. In the future, there will be
dual
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a dual
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carriageway established surrounding the
town
centre
. The location of the school, park and housing remain unchanged in the future, unless there will be some part of the park cleared up
therefore
leaving so much space for the new residents located beside it.
Moreover
, the main
road
will be demolished and turned into
pedestrian
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a pedestrian
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way only.
Furthermore
, the countryside and shops north of the countryside will become shopping
centre
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centres
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completed with public facilities
such
as
carpark
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a car park
at the east of the shopping
centre
and a bus station nearby.
Lastly
, the new resident will be
also
added to the end of the side of the dual carriageway
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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