Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it it more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some learners of tertiary level are interested in other
courses
with their core
courses
,
while
others prefer to concentrate only on the primary
courses
. As knowledge of other
subjects
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important to
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, I think
students
should
study
these
along with
their professional studies.
Firstly
, some
students
like to
study
not only their own
subjects
but
also
other ones. They can understand the significance of learning about
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relevant
things that were not covered by their own syllabus.
For example
, a civil engineering student should learn about the basic
priciples
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principles
of physics to properly grasp his topics related to the mechanics of structure and building. If he doesn't get the opportunity to learn general physics, he may get
trouble
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to solve
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problems of civil engineering in future.
This
example can be applied to other
subjects
as well.
Therefore
, every student should have
qualification
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qualifications
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in other
subjects
in addition
to his main ones.
On the other hand
, there are
also
some people in universities, who think giving attention to other
subjects
is a waste of time.
According to
them, every undergraduate should be proficient in one field only.
For instance
, if someone
get
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admitted into
a
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electrical engineering program, he or she must
study
only the
courses
of
this
program.
However
, focusing only on
single
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subject can be detrimental for any future professional. Though they can manage a job in their field, the lack of knowledge will
meke
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make
them suffer to work properly in
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run. In conclusion, a number of
students
believe that they should
study
other
subjects
with their main
subjects
while
others oppose it. I support the learning of other
courses
along with
the primary ones
,
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because
these extra knowledge
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will help the
students
in their later life.
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