The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides information regarding the percentage of three metals’ monthly changing
price
in 2014. Overall
, the graph strongly fluctuated within a year
. It was specifically showed
by nickel and zinc as they Wrong verb form
shown
were happened
to Change to the active voice
happened
have happened
change
position at the end
of the year
.
Initially
, nickel emerged to be the highest change
compared to others. Nevertheless
, it was
rapidly dropped to -3% in June, which is the lowest Unnecessary verb
apply
price
change
in the year
. Then
, there are
slight growth with Change the verb form
is
small
dip in October, yet, Add an article
a small
at the end
of the year
it took the lowest position of 1%.
By contrast
, zinc was the lowest in
the beginning of the Change the preposition
at
year
, but then
it increased slightly to 3% in the next month. Although
, the next 8 months the price
fall
gradually, it exceeded the Replace the word
fell
change
price
of nickel. In November, the price
sky rocketed
and Correct your spelling
skyrocketed
keep
growing surpassing 2%, which was the highest percentage in December.
Wrong verb form
kept
Lastly
, cooper price
change
percentage was
not really Verb problem
did
fluctuating
. It showed some declines over the months until June, reaching approximately -0.5%. There was a constant in the next three months and started to grow in November and took the second place highest just as in the first month at the very end.Wrong verb form
fluctuate
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, year, change with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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