The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph provides information regarding the percentage of three metals’ monthly changing

price

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in 2014.

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, the graph strongly fluctuated within a

year

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. It was specifically

showed

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shown

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by nickel and zinc as they

were happened

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happened

have happened

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change

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position

at the end

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of the

year

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Initially

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, nickel emerged to be the highest

change

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compared to others.

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, it

was

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rapidly dropped to -3% in June, which is the lowest

price

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change

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in the

year

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Then

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, there

are

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slight growth with

small

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a small

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dip in October, yet,

at the end

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of the

year

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it took the lowest position of 1%.

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, zinc was the lowest

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the beginning of the

year

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, but

then

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it increased slightly to 3% in the next month.

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, the next 8 months the

price

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fall

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fell

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gradually, it exceeded the

change

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price

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of nickel. In November, the

price

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sky rocketed

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skyrocketed

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and

keep

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kept

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growing surpassing 2%, which was the highest percentage in December.

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, cooper

price

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change

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percentage

was

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did

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not really

fluctuating

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fluctuate

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. It showed some declines over the months until June, reaching approximately -0.5%. There was a constant in the next three months and started to grow in November and took the second place highest just as in the first month at the very end.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words price, year, change with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

207 words

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volatile
stability
peak
trough
increment
decrement
steady
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increase
decrease
month-on-month
average monthly change
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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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