The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing. Some people this is due to problems such as the growing number of fast food outlets. Others believe that parents are to blame for not looking after their children's health. To what extent do you agree with these views?
In
developed
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a developed
country
, its being seen the number of overweight Fix the agreement mistake
countries
kids
is raising
day by day. Correct your spelling
rising
in
that case, some communities say Capitalize word
In
that is
because of fast
Correct article usage
the fast
food
habit
and, Fix the agreement mistake
habits
other
Fix the agreement mistake
others
saying
Wrong verb form
say
that is
because of
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apply
parents
are not well concern
about Replace the word
concerned
kids
health. In my opinion, if Change noun form
kids'
kid's
parents
take care of there
children Correct your spelling
their
then
this
problem
can be solved easily.
Firstly
, in first class countries fast food
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
avaiable
and you can have it Correct your spelling
available
in
a cheap price. because of that, Change preposition
at
when ever
a childCorrect your spelling
whenever
feel
hungry he can get it very easily from Change the verb form
feels
nearby
branch and Add an article
a nearby
they
can buy it Correct pronoun usage
apply
in
a cheaper price. it Change preposition
at
also seen
that in Add the auxiliary verb
is also seen
case
of preparing Correct article usage
the case
time
, fast food
need
only 5 to 10 Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
minuites
Correct your spelling
minutes
while
other dishes take so long to prepare. for example
, In south
Correct your spelling
in South
korea
75% Change the capitalization
Korea
university
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of university
student
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students
went
to different fast Wrong verb form
go
food
restaurent
likeCorrect your spelling
restaurant
restaurants
as
, Change preposition
apply
kfc
, Correct your spelling
KFC
moms touch
etc Correct your spelling
Moms Touch
in
Change preposition
during
there
break Correct your spelling
their
time
. they have only 30 to 40 minuites
to it so it is Correct your spelling
minutes
cnvenient
to have a burger or chicken in that short amount of Correct your spelling
convenient
time
.
on the other hand
, if the parents
are not sincire
about their Correct your spelling
sincere
childrens
they might be in Correct your spelling
children
a
deep trouble.nowadays, Remove the article
apply
parents
are more busy with there
work and other staff Correct your spelling
their
furthermore
, they do not prepare food
at home thus
, they order food
from outsides
. in that case, Fix the agreement mistake
outside
kids
are not getting proper
Correct article usage
the proper
food
what
they need. Correct word choice
that
for instance
, in south korea
both Correct your spelling
South Korea
parents
are doing full
Add a hyphen
full-time
time
job
as if, they always have Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
there
Correct your spelling
their
meal
from Fix the agreement mistake
meals
outsides
.
in my concern, if Fix the agreement mistake
outside
parents
were become
Fix the infinitive
to become
carefull
about their Correct your spelling
careful
carefully
child
Fix the agreement mistake
children
this
problem
canbe
solved. if they make Correct your spelling
can be
food
for kids
at home and maintain a healthy routine so that child must have to avide
by the schedule.
in conclusion, Correct your spelling
abide
its
a great Replace the word
it's
it is
problem
if the kids
were
too heavy so that, if we have to solve Wrong verb form
are
this
problem
we must have sincire
Correct your spelling
strict
parents
and also
maintain a healthy routine so that, we can overweigh
Verb problem
overcome
this
problem
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