The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
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The line graph gives information about how each month's average expenditure on
three
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different kinds of metals changed over the year 2014.
It is clear that
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the total monthly spending on these
three
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materials
overall
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fell with the most dramatic decrease in the price of nickel
while
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the two other ones had
even
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a steady rise. Over the first month, the prices of Nickle and
Copper
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dropped by 2 and 1
percent
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respectively
while
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this
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amount for Zinc experienced an increase of 2
percent
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. Over the following
three
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months, all
three
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metals cost less until
finally
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the price for
copper
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levelled off in May
although
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two others continued to fall. On the first of Jun, having dropped to its lower price, the figure for Nickle
then
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rose by 2 per cent and remained until the first of September
where
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followed by a drop of 1 per cent. The same trend can be seen for Zinc and
Copper
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staying stable from January to September. Over the
last
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two months, all figures saw an increase of 3
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percent
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per cent
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for Zinc and nickel,
as well as
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1
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percent
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per cent
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for
Copper
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words three, copper, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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