The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
The line graph gives information about how each month's average expenditure on
three
different kinds of metals changed over the year 2014.
It is clear that
the total monthly spending on these
three
materials
overall
fell with the most dramatic decrease in the price of nickel
while
the two other ones had
even
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a steady rise. Over the first month, the prices of Nickle and
Copper
dropped by 2 and 1
percent
respectively
while
this
amount for Zinc experienced an increase of 2
percent
. Over the following
three
months, all
three
metals cost less until
finally
the price for
copper
levelled off in May
although
two others continued to fall. On the first of Jun, having dropped to its lower price, the figure for Nickle
then
rose by 2 per cent and remained until the first of September
where
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followed by a drop of 1 per cent. The same trend can be seen for Zinc and
Copper
staying stable from January to September. Over the
last
two months, all figures saw an increase of 3
percent
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for Zinc and nickel,
as well as
1
percent
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for
Copper
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, copper, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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