It is common for people to travel long distances for work and study. Some argue that longer commute times affect people in a negative way while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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age and have different gadgets. Many special programs and some technologies support us and make our

live

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easier every day in

some

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different parts like cooking, conversations,

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and

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important or funny things. Education and acquisition of knowledge are not exceptions. People spend a lot of

time

and power

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past

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, because they should visit libraries and

found

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needed books. But now we have more advantages that computers are becoming an essential part of education. We can find all

information

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all topics in the

world

from

game’s

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roles to scientific chemistry, which we need. We can find it fast and without

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outside a house.

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, students in the

world

spend

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time

than before

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their student projects,

presentations

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and presentations

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to write

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notes,

articles

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. But, unfortunately, among many advantages presents some disadvantages. People remember something new more

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, because we can

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find it.

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phenomenon has explained

psychologists

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to psychologists

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value

the

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things less, when we can

easier to

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get

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. The second famous disadvantage is now we live in

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of available

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. And

this

different

information

around us everywhere. It

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us, to

make

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troubles when we

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ours

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projects. We should spend more

time

and make more efforts to

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my opinion all computer technologies,

all

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programs and gadgets have more profit,

then

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damage. Today people have access to all

information

and knowledge in the

world

, wherever they are. It allows them to get an education without

spend

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much money or

time

. And someone in

poor

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a poor

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country or family can get some

specialty

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and work, which will change his/her life. And maybe he/she will become a famous scientist who

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big

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project, which will change

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world

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3Word repetition
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288 words

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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