Many of today's most urgent problems can only be solved through international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is said that a lot of nowadays' most urgent

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like pandemics,wars and climate change can be solved through worldwide cooperation.In my opinion, I definitely support

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view and am going to share my own view in

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essay. To start with,most agenda

problems

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are caused by humanity and solving them would be much more easier,if people started working together on them.

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, these

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are dangerous not only for some

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or continents

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but for all humankind.

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,climate change,which means the increasing temperature all over the

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leads to irredeemable consequences for the whole planet.Despite these

problems

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,most of the governments worldwide

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not established the policy of saving our planet,

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others do

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times bigger job to avoid climate

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,certain

countries

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can not solve serious

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without financial and material support,which can only be provided

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developed

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,the recent pandemic,which completely changed our

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.Many

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did not have enough resources and funds to set up or buy

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treatment to stop the virus from spreading.But financial cooperation,which was led by the biggest

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economies,helped to work out

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difficult situation and prevent

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of many people.

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,I surely agree that international communities may help

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if they work together and

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will definitely fix many people's

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cooperation the consequences would be much more negative

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Many of today's most urgent problems can only be solved through international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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