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Many of today's most urgent problems can only be solved through international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is said that a lot of nowadays' most urgent
problems
 like pandemics,wars and climate change can be solved through worldwide cooperation.In my opinion, I definitely support
this
 view and am going to share my own view in
this
 essay. To start with,most agenda
problems
 are caused by humanity and solving them would be much more easier,if people started working together on them.
Also
, these
problems
 are dangerous not only for some
countries
 or continents
,
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but for all humankind.
For instance
,climate change,which means the increasing temperature all over the
world
and
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leads to irredeemable consequences for the whole planet.Despite these
problems
,most of the governments worldwide
did
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 not established the policy of saving our planet,
while
 others do
two
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 times bigger job to avoid climate
changes
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.
Furthermore
,certain
countries
 can not solve serious
problems
 without financial and material support,which can only be provided
from
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 developed
countries
.
For example
,the recent pandemic,which completely changed our
world
.Many
countries
 did not have enough resources and funds to set up or buy
covid
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COVID-19
 treatment to stop the virus from spreading.But financial cooperation,which was led by the biggest
world
 economies,helped to work out
this
 difficult situation and prevent
death
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 of many people.
To sum up
,I surely agree that international communities may help
this
world
 if they work together and
this
 will definitely fix many people's
problems
.And as we can see in the
last
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 cooperation the consequences would be much more negative
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task response
Your essay demonstrates a basic understanding of the task and provides a partial response. However, the arguments lack depth and could benefit from more development and elaboration.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a logical structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the progression of ideas could be smoother, and the link between paragraphs could be strengthened to enhance coherence.
lexical resource
Your use of vocabulary is adequate, but there is a lack of variety and precision in your word choice. Consider using more diverse and sophisticated vocabulary to enhance the quality of your writing.
grammatical range
Your essay demonstrates a basic command of grammar and sentence structure. However, there are noticeable errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and word choice. Aim for greater accuracy and complexity in your sentence structures.

Word Count

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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