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Many of today's most urgent problems can only be solved through international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#cooperation
It is said that a lot of nowadays' most urgent
problems
 like pandemics,wars and climate change can be solved through worldwide cooperation.In my opinion, I definitely support
this
 view and am going to share my own view in
this
 essay. To start with,most agenda
problems
 are caused by humanity and solving them would be much more easier,if people started working together on them.
Also
, these
problems
 are dangerous not only for some
countries
 or continents
,
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but for all humankind.
For instance
,climate change,which means the increasing temperature all over the
world
and
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leads to irredeemable consequences for the whole planet.Despite these
problems
,most of the governments worldwide
did
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 not established the policy of saving our planet,
while
 others do
two
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 times bigger job to avoid climate
changes
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.
Furthermore
,certain
countries
 can not solve serious
problems
 without financial and material support,which can only be provided
from
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 developed
countries
.
For example
,the recent pandemic,which completely changed our
world
.Many
countries
 did not have enough resources and funds to set up or buy
covid
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COVID-19
 treatment to stop the virus from spreading.But financial cooperation,which was led by the biggest
world
 economies,helped to work out
this
 difficult situation and prevent
death
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 of many people.
To sum up
,I surely agree that international communities may help
this
world
 if they work together and
this
 will definitely fix many people's
problems
.And as we can see in the
last
 example without
it's
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 cooperation the consequences would be much more negative
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