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The pictures below show the process of making clothes from recycled plastic bottles.

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The procedure illustrates the process of manufacturing clothes by using recycled plastic bottles.
Overall
,
this
 is a complicated man-made linear process involving 2 main stages, plastic bottle processing,
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, and physical transformation. The process begins with used plastic bottles being accumulated collected and transported by lorry to waste treatment factories where they are sorted and
then
 cut into small pieces by a specialized machine. After that, these particles pass through washing equipment
an
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 apparatus to be cleaned. Following that, they are
sun dried
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 for 10 hours to guarantee there is no water left. In the next step, they are transferred to a cylindrical boiler to be melted down.
Subsequently
, the melted substance is strained and made into yarn.
This
 yarn is
then
 ready to be weaved into the desired fabric
that is
 suitable for making clothes and rolled up into a roll of cloth. The final product is clothes made of recycled materials.
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