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The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phones, national and international fixed-line, and services in America between 2001 and 2010.

The graph below shows consumers’ average annual expenditure on cell phones, national and international fixed-line, and services in America between 2001 and 2010.
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The
line
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 chart gives information about the amount of money
spending
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 on cell Phones national and International fixed -
line
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 and services from 2001 to 2010 in America.
overall
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, the cell
Phone
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phone
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scrvice
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service
 was the most
consumption
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 in 2010,
while
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 the
Internial
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Internal
 fixed-
line
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shown
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showed
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 steady or constant spending during the period. In2001,
national
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the national
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 fixed
line
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 stood at 700$, after that fallin around 200 $ in 2006.
In Contrast
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, cell Phone service at the
begining
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beginning
 Was 200 $ for expenditure and rose to
reached
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reach
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 500$ in 2006, it continued to rise until the end of the
peried
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period
 in 2010
about
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at about
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 750 $. The figures
of
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for
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 international fixed-
line
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 service remained stable
Fram
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from
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 2004 to 2010
aroud
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around
 300$.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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