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Band 7.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You recently saw an advertisement about a business conference that can be helpful for your work. Write a letter to your manager asking permission to attend the conference. In your letter, say: what the conference is about how you know about the conference explain to him/her why it is important that you attend this conference You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Mr. Lovjit, I hope you are doing well. My name is Tajinder Singh, a junior project manager at your organization. I am writing
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 letter to ask you for permission to participate in a business conference.
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 event is organized by a famous human resource development company from the UK.
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 week,
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 conference was advertised in the newspaper. It would be a two-day-long event, where I would get a chance to meet experienced business professionals. They are going to give lectures on various skills for working professionals.
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 program is mainly focused on the importance of digital marketing and artificial intelligence. Right after I saw the advertisement in the newspaper, I called the program coordinator to gather some information about the event and he suggested that I reserve a seat. As you already know, our company has recently started taking an interest in artificial intelligence. So it will be quite informative and help us to be up-to-date about other latest technologies. I would request you to allow me to attend
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 conference. Yours sincerely, TS

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task response
Provide more details about what you hope to learn specifically from the conference and how it will benefit the company.
coherence and cohesion
Organize the content into clearer paragraphs to improve the overall structure and coherence of the letter.
lexical resource
Use a wider variety of vocabulary to convey your ideas more effectively and precisely.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to avoid errors and improve overall fluency.
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