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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years
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The line graph compares three
companies
 in terms of their
waste
output
 between the years 2000 and 2015.
It is clear that
 there were significant changes in the amounts of
waste
 produced by all three
companies
 shown on the graph.
While
companies
 A and
B
 saw
waste
output
 fall over the 15-year period, the amount of
waste
 produced by
company
C
 increased considerably. In 2000,
company
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Company
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 A produced 12
tonnes
 of
waste
,
while
companies
B
 and
C
 produced around 8
tonnes
 and 4
tonnes
 of
waste
 material respectively. Over the following 5 years, the
waste
output
 of
companies
B
 and
C
 rose by around 2
tonnes
, but the figure for
company
 A fell by approximately 1 tonne. From 2005 to 2015,
company
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Company
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 A cut
waste
 production by roughly 3
tonnes
, and
company
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Company
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B
 reduced its
waste
 by around 7
tonnes
.
By contrast
,
company
C
 saw an increase in
waste
 production of approximately 4
tonnes
 over the same 10-year period. By 2015,
company
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Company
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C
’s
waste
output
 had risen to 10
tonnes
,
while
 the respective amounts of
waste
 from
companies
 A and
B
 had dropped to 8
tonnes
 and only 3
tonnes
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