You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. A friend of yours is thinking about applying for the same course that you did at university. He/She has asked for your advice about studying this subject. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

Dear Mohit, How are you? Hope you are in good health and in high spirits. I have received your email that you are planning to apply Business Communication
which I completed
year in Dubai. I am writing
letter to share some advice that might help you in your semester. I have completed
with a good ranking from a reputed institute. The whole study material is designed in
a manner that helps in my current organization. You can
opt marketing as a specialization area which will assist you in your career path. Since you have good communication skills
by completing
will assist you in enhancing dealing with external stakeholders and organizing events in offices. To apply for
university, you need to clear an English proficiency test from a reputed institute
you can apply for
through an online portal. Hope you find the above-mentioned suggestions useful. Feel free to connect with me in case of any doubt. Yours friendly, Amandeep
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task response
Task response should focus more on addressing the friend's request for advice on studying the subject and its application, rather than the general discussion of course completion.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are friendly, but could be more formal as this is a letter of advice for a university course application.
lexical resource
The letter lacks professional and academic vocabulary related to the subject, and could benefit from a wider range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely.
grammatical range
There are several grammatical errors and sentence structure issues that impact the overall clarity and coherence of the letter. Use of more complex sentence structures would also enhance the score.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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