You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. A friend of yours is thinking about applying for the same course that you did at university. He/She has asked for your advice about studying this subject. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

#minutes #friend #course #university #advice

Dear Mohit, How are you? Hope you are in good health and in high spirits. I have received your email that you are planning to apply Business Communication

course

which I completed

last

year in Dubai. I am writing

this

letter to share some advice that might help you in your semester. I have completed

this

course

with a good ranking from a reputed institute. The whole study material is designed in

such

a manner that helps in my current organization. You can

also

opt marketing as a specialization area which will assist you in your career path. Since you have good communication skills

therefore

by completing

this

course

will assist you in enhancing dealing with external stakeholders and organizing events in offices. To apply for

this

course

this

university, you need to clear an English proficiency test from a reputed institute

then

you can apply for

this

course

through an online portal. Hope you find the above-mentioned suggestions useful. Feel free to connect with me in case of any doubt. Yours friendly, Amandeep

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task response

Task response should focus more on addressing the friend's request for advice on studying the subject and its application, rather than the general discussion of course completion.

coherence and cohesion

The greeting and closing are friendly, but could be more formal as this is a letter of advice for a university course application.

lexical resource

The letter lacks professional and academic vocabulary related to the subject, and could benefit from a wider range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely.

grammatical range

There are several grammatical errors and sentence structure issues that impact the overall clarity and coherence of the letter. Use of more complex sentence structures would also enhance the score.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

175 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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