Some people believe that children should receive compulsory education at public schools while others prefer private schools. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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For those
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think that children must study in
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government
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rather than
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schools
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.
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, I think
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private
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better than formal
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because there are so many advantages that you can obtain various
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, but in public
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that
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you can go to school for free. Some people consider
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their children
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public
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because they realize it
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more
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cheaper than private
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. In my country, for those who come from low-income
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family
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it is a good option to go to public school because you can get
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education for free, and there are so many
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which
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you would get
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scholarships
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, national and international events, et cetera.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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