Some people believe that children should receive compulsory education at public schools while others prefer private schools. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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think that children must study in

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schools

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private

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better than formal

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because there are so many advantages that you can obtain various

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, but in public

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you can go to school for free. Some people consider

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their children

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cheaper than private

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it is a good option to go to public school because you can get

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education for free, and there are so many

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, national and international events, et cetera.

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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2 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people believe that children should receive compulsory education at public schools while others prefer private schools. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Children all over the world should learn to speak a single, universal language fluently in addition to their native language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?