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sOME PEOPLE BEILEVE keeping animals as a pet is good thing for children others think it is advantageous and unhealthy which option do you agree.

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Recommendation Letter November 14, 2023 Dear Admission Officer,
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Kailin
’s application to your esteemed university. As her director in Meicheng, I have the privilege of witnessing her remarkable performance and understanding of her job. Thanks to her excellent communication skills and teamwork spirit, she is actively making contributions and
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 to work with.
Kailin
 believes that English education is important and people will benefit from cultural and linguistic diversity. And after learning about her passion for
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language education, I wholeheartedly recommend her for admission to your graduate program.
Kailin
 is highly motivated and eager to learn. She seems to have endless energy to help and encourage job seekers of all groups. She has a positive attitude and always seems happy to do whatever she is asked to do.
Kailin
 is a fast learner, even without having to be told, she always seems to know what to do next and how to do it well because she is always paying attention and learning through observing. When she was asked to join us as an employee, there
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 days’ worth of paperwork and training that needed to be done, but she finished her paperwork, completed
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 training, and registered for scheduled
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 before the next time that she worked. She looks for opportunities to serve where she is most needed. I see her as a problem solver because she not only notices problems
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 but takes care of them. On the whole, I see potential in
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. I am glad to hear about her plan to pursue postgraduate study in the field of TESOL, which will deepen her existing knowledge. I hereby strongly recommend her to your esteemed program. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you need any additional information regarding the applicant. Yours sincerely, Zeyin
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PhD candidate, Central China Normal University Director, Meicheng Recruitment Co.LTD. [email protected]
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advantageous
  • unhealthy
  • benefits
  • responsibility
  • empathy
  • emotional well-being
  • social skills
  • confidence
  • disadvantages
  • health risks
  • allergies
  • infections
  • animal dander
  • time
  • effort
  • financial resources
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