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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates a kind of and the amount of junk food eaten over a period of 25 years by Australian teenagers.
Overall
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, it can be seen that more young teenagers selected to eat fries’
fish
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 and potato
chips
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 than other types in 1975, and
then
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 hamburgers became the amount of
people
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 to eat and the lowest was
fish
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 and
chips
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 in 2000. To start with, the significantly that
fish
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 and
chips
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 were popular fast food among young
people
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, which were eaten 100
times
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 a year.
In contrast
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, the hamburger and pizza combined were not more than 20
times
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 in 1975. Between 1975 and 1986, the figure for
fish
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 and
chips
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 fluctuated and
then
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 rapidly dropped to the bottom to became the lowest in that
people
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 disliked the choice of
this
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, which was less than 40
times
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at the end
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 year.
On the other hand
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, hamburgers and pizza were not popular in 1975. As time went on, they gradually became more popular than
fish
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 and
chips
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 among young
people
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, which reached a peak of more than 100
times
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 and approximately 85 respectively in the period of the graph shows end year .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, chips, people, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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