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Some people believe that the downward trend in the number of existing languages may make life easier. I concur with this perspective because the diversity of languages is responsible for the globalization deceleration and divisions between communities.

#people #trend #languages #life #perspective #diversity #globalization #deceleration #divisions #communities
Several factors including upcoming technological advancement and
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 emergence of social media have resulted in more socialization via the medium.
Moreover
, improved transportation aggravated interactions within the different societies.
This
 way the original
language
 of those seems to be decreasing every year. With
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, some believe that it is okay to be with minimal communication medium.
While
 others think there are risks involved with
such
 situations. I too consider conversing in our native
language
 is essential and needs to be preserved. There are certain people who believe that the fewer spoken
language
 on
this
 planet the happier and easier our life will be. It brings
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commonness among individuals without having to struggle
learning
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 foreign languages.
For instance
, we see more
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translators and tour
guide
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guides
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 with certain
language
 experts who
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can speak multiple languages. The existence of all these people is
due to
lack
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 of commonness within
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humanity, where when we travel to other places we
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have to hire a tour guide with
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.
Nevertheless
, we see many
countries
 in the world where they feel
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 pinch of losing their precious
language
 we say. I personally feel that the existence of different
language
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 in
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society is a jewel of the country for its security and
economical
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 purpose as well. We see
countries
 in the world with lots of cultural conflicts going
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 the extent of colonizing smaller
countries
 all because certain aspects of the culture
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 being vanished, where the
language
 is the main component of the culture.
To conclude
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preservation
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 of minor languages around the world is seen as quite important for
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 security and for the generation of personal income and
countries
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 revenue as a whole.
Therefore
language
 needs to be preserved from extinction.
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task response
The essay meets the requirements of the task but needs to provide a more balanced discussion of both sides of the argument.
coherence cohesion
The organization of ideas is generally logical, with a clear introduction and conclusion. However, there are some coherence and cohesion issues within paragraphs that impact the flow of the essay.
lexical resource
There is a good range of vocabulary used to express ideas. However, there are instances of inaccurate word choices and awkward phrasing that affect the overall lexical resource.
grammatical range
The essay demonstrates a fair control of grammatical structures, but there are noticeable errors in sentence structure, verb tense consistency, and subject-verb agreement.

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