Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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, many
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about
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the
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students
learning in
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college
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should
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explore
different
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studies
study
in school, or only focus on their original main subjects. In the following
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, I will discuss those two different thinking ways, and give my personal view
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the end of the article.
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, the
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students
try something they
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unfamiliar
, may trust
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the door to study are not the only path to get better. Because
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you
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by the different areas, might
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influence
back their main study,
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help you
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the problems in another way that you can't image if you always stand in the same place.
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another
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perspective
perspectives
that
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students
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should
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their
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,
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reason might be
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afraid
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several departments
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the same time, they may didn't really get any basic in the end. In my
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conclusion
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, it is
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truly
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. But I think will
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to
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with the
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students
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to
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explore
different subjects.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Broaden
  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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