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Although there are a lot of translation software available, learning a language could still be advantageous. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays there are a lot of translation software available,
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, there is an opinion that learning a
language
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 could still be more helpful. In my opinion, both points of view make sense, but in the contemporary
world
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 I would definitely choose to know
language
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. It is evident that everyone has different goals, respectively, not everyone should learn foreign
languages
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. Imagine, you enjoy living in the country where you were born.
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 it is better for you to spend time in a more profitable way.
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,
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 adore engineering software,
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, it will be more useful to waste time on improving your engineering skills
instead
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 of studying
languages
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.
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, it is said that in
modern
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word
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 there are many translators
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 can fully support your communication with your customers or boss if you work from home.
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, even if you want to travel, it is easy to learn some essential words and use your phone to translate something more difficult.
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, if you have purposes
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 as living, studying or working in foreign countries, it is much better to know a
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, my goal is to study in
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 university in English in order to have the opportunity to work around the world and live in many countries. In that case, the need for
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 proficiency is evident because of many factors. I think one of them is just the convenience of routine life.
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, I believe that in today’s
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 it would be better to know some international
languages
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, because almost everyone wants to visit many countries, to have more opportunities and live a wealthy life. All of these things are easier to achieve with knowledge of
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Also
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 humans are social creatures,
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 why communication is an essential part of our lives.

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Your essay provides a partially complete response to the prompt but could benefit from further development and support for your ideas. Ensure that your examples and reasoning directly support your stance on the issue.
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Use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more precisely. Provide more varied and sophisticated vocabulary to enhance your essay.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural Appreciation
  • Cognitive Flexibility
  • Idiomatic Expressions
  • Career Advancement
  • Multilingual
  • Proficiency
  • Empathy
  • Cultural Barriers
  • Native Speaker Fluency
  • Colloquialisms
  • Language Acquisition
  • Immersive Experience
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