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In some countries, young people are living in richer and healthier condition but less happy. What are the reasons? What might be done to solve this issue?

#countries #people #condition
Nowadays, some folk
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 that
young
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the young
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 generation
have
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 a
wealth
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wealthy
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life
 and
live
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 in really great conditions but a lack of luckiness
make
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 their
life
 unsuccessful. The main reason for
this
 is that social
medias
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 destroy their
life
 and
spend
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 more
time
 with close
people
 is a viable solution. One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that even young
people
 very rich and live in benevolent conditions have a lack of happiness because of social
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media
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 where
people
 acquire
sense
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a sense
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 of happiness from it but not from real
life
 and it
destroy
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 their
dophamine
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dopamine
 system .
For instance
, if they
will
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eat
very
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 yummy meal,
such
 as chocolate, it will give them natural
dophamine
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dopamine
,
whereas
 social
medias
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media
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 will give
themselves
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them
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dophamine
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dopamine
 for a couple of
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times
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 and it can badly
affected
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on
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their well-being. A primary example of
this
students
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is students
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 from the USA,
which
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who
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 spend all of their
time
 watching Instagram and
as a result
 they
had
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a issues
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issues
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 with their mental health. The most practical solution to
this
 is that abandon watching social
medias
 and spend most of the
time
 with family
due to
 the fact that they will support emotionally
people
 and when folk will
be
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 near close
people
 it might give them a sense of enjoyment because family play a key role in human's
life
.
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, if they
will be
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are
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 near family, they will not be alone and they will be more happy. Recent
reseacrh
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research
 found that over half of
population
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the population
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 who was rich but felt less happy increased their productivity and were happy because of
family
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the family
a family
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 who
aid
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themselves
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them
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 in
the
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difficult
time
. In conclusion,
obtain
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wealthy
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a wealthy
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life
 and
do
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not
be
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being
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 happy
it
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apply
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is
real
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a real
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 mistake and to prevent it most
people
 should follow
examples
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 of other public,
such
 as
abandon to watch
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abandoning watching
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 social
medias
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media
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 and
be spend
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spending
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time
 with family.
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