The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average austraian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
The pie charts illustrate the average
house keeping
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housekeeping
energy
consumption and proportions of the earth heating gases of household appliences
in Australia.
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appliances
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