new technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, the development of
technology
and ways of buying and selling
products
are changing
the
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consumers’ lives. I strongly agree that they can be beneficial for improving new habits of
people
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people's
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consumptions
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. On the one hand, the development of
technology
has several negative impacts.
Firstly
,
the
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increasing
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of
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in
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technological
using
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, we can buy
products
from
other country
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another country
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by online. Local brands have to compete with imported brands. It will be very challenging because they must keep their quality
with
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at
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low prices.
For example
, there are several
shoes’
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shoes
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brands sold in the world with high quality, so some
people
choose to buy the imported rather than the local ones.
Secondly
,
people
who cannot operate
technology
, specifically social media, will face
the
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difficulties
to sell
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in selling
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their
products
. It becomes a disaster for them because their
products
cannot be sold.
On the other hand
, the technological advancement offers several benefits.
Firstly
,
using
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technology
, companies can produce their
products
easier and faster. It will reduce the time requirements
on
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production, so they can sell the
products
as quickly as possible.
Next,
sellers can expand their market targets widely. It is possible to export their
products
to other countries.
For example
,
people
in Indonesia can export their local
products
such
as “Batik” to Malaysia, Singapore, Thailand, or even to other regions.
Moreover
,
technology
brings a new trend
as
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which
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we call “online shopping habits” by using social media. Sellers can advertise their
products
in
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on
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social media and
also
sell
it
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them
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in
marketplace
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the marketplace
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.
Additionally
, the way
people
pay to buy something
changes
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has changed
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significantly. Now,
people
do not need to bring their wallets and their money
for buying
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to buy
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what they want. They can just bring their mobile phones and use the application
for paying
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to pay
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. In conclusion,
although
there are several negative effects of new technologies and how
people
buying
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buy
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and
selling
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sell
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something,
but
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I certainly agree that they can be beneficial for consumer lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transforming
  • consumers
  • buying and selling
  • new technologies
  • revolutionized
  • consumer experience
  • e-commerce
  • convenience
  • range of options
  • mobile payment systems
  • transactions
  • challenges
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