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One of the most important issues facing the world today is a shortage of food and some think genetically modified food is a possible solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?.

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There is no denying the fact that the shortage of
food
 can be a debatable subject.
While
 It is a commonly held belief that some individuals believe that one of the possible solutions is
genetically
Change the adverb
genetic
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 modification. there is
also
 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that being rich does genetically modified
food
 will dominate the
food
 sector.
To begin
 with, Genetically modified
food
 can help address the issue of
food
 shortage.
In other words
, it can help increase
food
 stock around the world.
In addition
, Genetically modified
food
 can increase crop yields and reduce wastage.
For example
, there was a study done in 2015 which supported the idea and it said that 80% of it helps in facing the shortage of
food
. Another point to consider is that Genetically modified
food
 can be resistant to pests and diseases. It is
also
 possible to say that, because we use chemical stuff it helps
protecting
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protect
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 it from pests.
Moreover
, it will help in providing stable resources that can help individuals in need.
For instance
, it can be resources can be used to support poor countries. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that the future of
food
 is genetically modified
food
, and it will become bigger than ever because it provides individuals and countries with stable resources of
food
, I suggest that the governments make programs that help to improve it.
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Task Achievement
Address the prompt more directly and clearly express your agreement or disagreement with genetically modified food as a solution to food shortage.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay lacks coherence and cohesion due to disorganized structure and unclear progression of ideas. Focus on organizing your ideas more effectively and use linking words to create logical flow.
Lexical Resource
Expand your lexical range and demonstrate more diverse and precise vocabulary to express your ideas effectively.
Grammatical Range
Work on using a wider variety of sentence structures and improve accuracy and precision in grammar usage.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shortage
  • genetically modified
  • crop yields
  • wastage
  • resistant
  • pests
  • diseases
  • potential health risks
  • biodiversity
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