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One of the most important issues facing the world today is a shortage of food and some think genetically modified food is a possible solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that the shortage of
food
 can be a debatable subject. It is a commonly held belief that some individuals believe that one of the possible solutions will be genetically modified
food
. there is
also
 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that being rich does genetically modified
food
 will dominate the
food
 sector.
To begin
 with, Genetically modified
food
 can help address the issue of
food
 shortage.
In other words
, it can help increase
food
 stock around the world.
In addition
, Genetically modified
food
 can increase crop yields and reduce wastage.
For example
, there was a study done in 2015 which supported the idea and it said that 80% of it helps in facing the shortage of
food
. Another point to consider is that Genetically modified
food
 can be resistant to pests and diseases. It is
also
 possible to say that, because we use chemical stuff it helps protect it from pests.
Moreover
, it will help in providing stable resources that can help individuals in need.
For instance
, it can be resources can be used to support poor countries. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that the future of
food
 is genetically modified
food
, and it will become bigger than ever because it provides individuals and countries with stable resources of
food
, I suggest that the governments make programs that help to improve it.
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Achievement
The essay partially addresses the task by discussing the issue of food shortage and genetically modified food. However, the viewpoints are not fully developed and the response lacks depth and clarity. Include a more thorough analysis of both sides of the argument and provide a clearer stance with supporting reasons.

Word Count

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shortage
  • genetically modified
  • crop yields
  • wastage
  • resistant
  • pests
  • diseases
  • potential health risks
  • biodiversity
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