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Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas in whichever way they wish. There should be no public or government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#artists #freedom #government #restrictions
Artists
 are more creative and symbolic than others. There would not be any restrictions to
artists
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public
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the public
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 or
government
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the government
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express
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expressing
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 their
ideas
 to
public
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the public
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due
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because
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 they need
freedom
 for their creations. I do not agree with
this
 statement
due to
 several reasons. In
this
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 I will explain
the
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my point of view. Mainly, all
artists
 are human beings, they have different thinking patterns and
variuos
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various
ideas
therefore
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, therefore
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, we
could not
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cannot
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 allow them to express their
ideas
 to
public
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the public
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 without filtering. Most
of
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the
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young people
following
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differnt
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different
 famous
charactors
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characters
 and they try to
immitate
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imitate
 them.
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this
 point, if they provide wrong information to their fans they will blindly believe that.
This
 will be harmful in the future.
For example
, in
the
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 TV
show
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show,
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 one of the famous
artist
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artists
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 said, it is not
neccassary
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necessary
 to
fine
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be fine
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 for sexual
violance
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violence
.
This
 show broadcast
in
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live so, all of his followers watching
this
 programme
however
, he said the wrong idea.
Therefore
, we do not want to give them
totall
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total
freedom
 to express their
dieas
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ideas
, there should be some
regulations
 to control them.
On the other hand
, every
artists
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are
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is
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 not
same
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the same
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. Some have
marverlous
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marvellous
ideas
, because of some rules and
regulations
 they can not give their creations to
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the audiance
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audiance
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audience
. For
instanse
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instance
, one
film
 has
produced
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been produced
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 in Sri Lanka,
film
 corporation not allow to release
to
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it to
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public
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the public
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 because
of
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some parts of
in
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this
film
not
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do not
did not
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 tally with their
regulations
 but somehow,
this
film
 has
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in
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internationaly
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internationally
international
.
Likewise
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 some
drawback
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 we can see when there are some
regulations
 for
artists
. In conclusion, I believe we want to give
freedom
for
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to
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artist
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artists
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 but sometimes they try to
missuse
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misuse
 it
due to
this
 reason I agree with the above
statament
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statement
. We need to give them
freedom
for
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to
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 some
extend
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extent
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. If we give them
totall
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total
 control sometimes there may be
bad
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a bad
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influance
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influence
for
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on
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thier follwers
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their followers
.
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