Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas in whichever way they wish. There should be no public or government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Artists
are more creative and symbolic than others. There would not be any restrictions to
artists
from
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or
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regarding
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their
ideas
to
public
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the public
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due
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they need
freedom
for their creations. I do not agree with
this
statement
due to
several reasons. In
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I will explain
the
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my point of view. Mainly, all
artists
are human beings, they have different thinking patterns and
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various
ideas
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, we
could not
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cannot
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allow them to express their
ideas
to
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without filtering. Most
of
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the
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young people
following
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differnt
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different
famous
charactors
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characters
and they try to
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imitate
them.
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this
point, if they provide wrong information to their fans they will blindly believe that.
This
will be harmful in the future.
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, in
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TV
show
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one of the famous
artist
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said, it is not
neccassary
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necessary
to
fine
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for sexual
violance
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violence
.
This
show broadcast
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live so, all of his followers watching
this
programme
however
, he said the wrong idea.
Therefore
, we do not want to give them
totall
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total
freedom
to express their
dieas
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ideas
, there should be some
regulations
to control them.
On the other hand
, every
artists
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are
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not
same
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the same
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. Some have
marverlous
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marvellous
ideas
, because of some rules and
regulations
they can not give their creations to
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the audiance
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audiance
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audience
. For
instanse
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instance
, one
film
has
produced
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in Sri Lanka,
film
corporation not allow to release
to
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public
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the public
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because
of
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some parts of
in
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this
film
not
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tally with their
regulations
but somehow,
this
film
has
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in
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internationaly
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internationally
international
.
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some
drawback
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we can see when there are some
regulations
for
artists
. In conclusion, I believe we want to give
freedom
for
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artist
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artists
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but sometimes they try to
missuse
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misuse
it
due to
this
reason I agree with the above
statament
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statement
. We need to give them
freedom
for
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some
extend
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. If we give them
totall
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total
control sometimes there may be
bad
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a bad
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influance
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influence
for
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thier follwers
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their followers
.
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