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The charts below give information about the people use public library and the main reasons to visit in BritIain in 1991 and 2000

The charts below give information about the people use public library and the main reasons to visit in BritIain in 1991 and 2000
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The pie chart in the picture describes the aims of
people
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 coming to the public
library
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 in Britain in the
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year
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years
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 1991 and 2000. There are several similarities between both years, with one difference in the
year
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 2000,
which
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in which
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 borrowing and returning videos
was
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 added. In the
year
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 1991, most
people
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 went to the public
library
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 for borrowing and returning purposes, rather than studying or obtaining information.
On
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In
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 2000, there
is
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was
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 a decline
of
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in
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people
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 going to the
library
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 to borrow or give back books that the
library
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 has
lend
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.
However
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, there is a rise in
people
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 wanting to get information from the
library
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 and borrowing videos.
On the other hand
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, there
is
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was
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 a very low number
in
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of
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people
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 going to the
library
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for studying
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to study
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 in
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year
Change the article
the year
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 2000.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, library, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • data comparison
  • trends
  • usage patterns
  • visitors
  • accessibility
  • information resources
  • traditional libraries
  • online resources
  • technological advancements
  • community support
  • promoting literacy
  • educational resources
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