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You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter, •say which part-time course you booked •explain why you need to cancel your booking • ask about booking a different course

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Dear Sir, I hope you are doing great. My name is Lovejit Singh, and a student in the Project Management course at your college. I am writing
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 letter to let you know that I booked a part-time course in electronics for the summer session which I want to change because of some reasons.
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, I am working part-time at Walmart Grocery store during my studies as I have to manage my own expenses. As you know, I enrolled
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 a program which starts in
summer
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the summer
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 but my supervisor told me that my working hours should be transferred to full-time after two months because there will be a shortage of workers during peak time. I
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 need money as I have to support my family in India.
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, I request you to cancel my booking for the diploma in Electronics as I am unable to manage my schedule.
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, if it is possible, I can take another course during the evening time. Please tell me about Cloud Computing and I want to enrol in the same. I am waiting for your response. Yours faithfully,
Lovejit
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Love it
 Singh

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