Some people think that money is one of the most essential factors in promoting happiness. Do you think people can be happy without much money? What the other factors contribute towards happiness?
Many
people
argue that money
is considered as
a factor Change preposition
apply
to be
happy in Change preposition
in being
life
,
like it is the only main factor toward Remove the comma
apply
happiness
. Meanhile
, in my opinion, Correct your spelling
Meanwhile
people
still can have a great life
consist a lof
of Correct your spelling
lot
happiness
even though they do not have a lot of money
,
because there are many Remove the comma
apply
aspect
Change to a plural noun
aspects
in
Change preposition
of
life
that also
play a vital role in creating happiness
.
Altough
having Correct your spelling
Although
money
brings happiness
, it does not necessarily mean that people
with a little
amount of Correct word choice
small
money
are unhappy. For example
, the comparison between citizen
in a developing country and developed Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
countries
. It is true regarding the fact that people
earn a lot of income in developing countries
, but it is commonly said by those Westerners whose
Correct pronoun usage
who
live
, grew upReplace the word
life
,
and pursue a career in their country that Remove the comma
apply
people
in developing countries
appeared
to be Wrong verb form
appear
more
happier, Change the word
apply
moreover
they Add a comma
moreover,
also
have a stronger connection among members of their family thus
making them always stay together through ups and downs which is lead to a
gratitude for the simplicity of Remove the article
apply
life
than those in developed countries
.
Finally
, another factor influencing happiness
is by having supporting and loving people
in one’s life
. That
factors are commonly used as a patokan to start living in a new place or choose to stay at one working place. Correct determiner usage
These
For instance
, being surrounded by neighborhoods
is considered by most Change the spelling
neighbourhoods
people
to be more valuable than any amount of money
, because they can get peaceful
of mind and heart without any worries. Replace the word
peace
Likewise
, to working
in a place, it will be much Wrong verb form
work
convenient
if we have helpful colleagues and bosses.
In conclusion, Correct quantifier usage
more convenient
money
is not the
essential Correct article usage
apply
of
Change preposition
to
happiness
, because happiness
can come from anywhere and any aspect of life
, such
as loving family, neighbor
, and even job satisfaction.Change the spelling
neighbour
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