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You are invited to a party, however, because of some reasons you didn’t attend. Write a letter to the friend who invites you: (1) explain the reason why you didn’t go; (2) express your apology; (3) ask about some details in the party.

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Dear John, Thanks for inviting me to your birthday
party
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 yesterday. I believe that you had a lot of fun at the
party
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. I’m sorry that I didn’t join your
party
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 yesterday since my daughter Mendy got flu and she was really sick yesterday. My husband and I took her to the Children’s Hospital to do
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 checks in case we didn’t give her the appropriate medicine. We went home straight after getting the prescription from the doctor and took care of Mendy the whole night. I remember that you planned to have a dancing
party
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 for your 30th birthday. We definitely need a catchup next week since I’d like to know more about your birthday
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. Hope to meet you soon. Yours sincerely. SJ
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task response
Expand more on the details of the party and how you felt about not being there
coherence and cohesion
The letter is well-structured and coherent, no issues here
lexical resource
Good use of vocabulary, but try to vary your sentence structures for more lexical resource
grammatical range
Sentence structures are generally accurate, but watch out for minor errors in punctuation and verb tenses

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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