Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in other country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opininos.
Some individuals think that
people
with Use synonyms
third
level of education like Correct article usage
a third
doctors
and engineers should be asked to Use synonyms
work
in the Use synonyms
country
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they
received their training. Rephrase
where they
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people
believe Use synonyms
professionals
should be free to Use synonyms
work
in Use synonyms
other
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another country
other countries
country
if they Use synonyms
decided
, I strongly believe they should be required to Wrong verb form
decide
work
in the Use synonyms
country
they were trained because they need to give back to their society and Use synonyms
country
.
Some Use synonyms
people
believe that Use synonyms
professionals
like Use synonyms
doctors
and engineers should feel free to Use synonyms
work
in other countries if they Use synonyms
decided
to do it because they Wrong verb form
decide
search
for Wrong verb form
are searching
high-job paying
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high-paying
salaries
and Use synonyms
better
future. They believe that Correct article usage
a better
people
with Use synonyms
third
level of education need to be paid Correct article usage
a third
with
higher Change preposition
apply
salaries
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plan
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plans
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however
they need to Add a comma
however,
left
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leave
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the
country
where they were Use synonyms
bornt
. Most importantly, they left behind important Correct your spelling
born
people
in their lives like fathers and Use synonyms
sibillings
. Correct your spelling
siblings
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the
higher drain brain population because most Correct article usage
a
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apply
doctors
are Use synonyms
unde
- pay and Correct your spelling
under
they
barely earn a decent salary, so they migrate to The United States or other countries. Correct pronoun usage
apply
However
, I disagree with Linking Words
this
type of behaviour because these Linking Words
professionals
need to give back to their community.
Other Use synonyms
people
think that Use synonyms
professionals
should be asked to stay in the Use synonyms
country
they received their training because their society Use synonyms
need
them. Change the verb form
needs
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, if they Linking Words
left
the Wrong verb form
leave
country
, many Use synonyms
people
will suffer from Use synonyms
high cost
services because Add a hyphen
high-cost
of
few Change preposition
apply
professionals
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decided
to stay in the Wrong verb form
decide
country
. Use synonyms
As a result
, many families Linking Words
emigrates
with them Change the verb form
emigrate
as well as
these Linking Words
doctors
and engineers. In sum, Use synonyms
government
need to increase their Add an article
the government
salaries
to Use synonyms
avoid
these Verb problem
prevent
people
Use synonyms
left
their communities and families. To illustrate, in The United States Wrong verb form
from leaving
doctors
have Use synonyms
a
high paying Correct article usage
apply
salaries
and Use synonyms
they
are highly appreciated Correct pronoun usage
apply
in
companies, so they tend to Change preposition
by
saty
in the USA to provide a good service to their Correct your spelling
stay
people
. I totally agree with Use synonyms
this
type of mentality and high-job paying Linking Words
salaries
for Use synonyms
professionals
who obtain a degree because they decided to serve their Use synonyms
country
.
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To conclude
, Linking Words
although
some individuals believe that Linking Words
professionals
should feel free to Use synonyms
work
in other countries because they want to have Use synonyms
a better job opportunities
, I believe they should stay with Correct the article-noun agreement
better job opportunities
a better job opportunity
they
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the
people
in their Use synonyms
country
to support their communities, and the Use synonyms
goevernment
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government
governments
need
to increase their Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
salaries
for Use synonyms
professionals
with third level of education.Use synonyms
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task response
Addressing both views effectively and providing a balanced argument would improve the task response score. Ensure a clear opinion is expressed in the introduction and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks clear organization and connections between ideas. Use transition words and phrases to improve coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use more precise and accurate language to convey your ideas effectively.
grammatical range
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Focus on sentence structure and use a variety of complex structures.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.