The table shows data about the underground railway systems in six major cities with the date opened, kilometers of the route, and passenger numbers per year in millions.

The table shows data about the underground railway systems in six major cities with the date opened, kilometers of the route, and passenger numbers per year in millions.
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The table compares the six networks in terms of their age, size and the number of people who use them each
year
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It is clear that
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the three oldest underground systems are larger and serve significantly more passengers than the newer systems. The London
underground
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is the oldest
system
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, having opened in 1863. It Is
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the largest
system
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, with 394
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Kilometres
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of route. The second largest
system
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, in Paris, is only about half the size of the London underground, with 199
kilometres
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of route.
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, it serves more people per
year
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only third in terms of size, the Tokyo
system
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is easily the most used, with 1927 million passengers per
year
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. Of the three newer networks, the Washington DC underground is the most extensive, with 126
kilometres
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of route, compared to only 11
kilometres
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and 28
kilometres
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for the Kyoto and Los Angeles systems. The Los Angeles network is the newest, having opened in 2001,
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the Kyoto network is the smallest and serves only 45 million passengers per
year
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