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The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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the given chart provides information about four modes of transportation used both to travel and work in the
year
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of
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1960, 1980, and 2000. in general, people likely used different ways to go in each period. data
on
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from
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 1960 shows that pupils dominant to go
by walk
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walking
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, followed by riding a bike, and only 5% of travellers
using
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use
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car
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a car
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 and just above it
using
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use
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bus
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the bus
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.
However
, in the year
of
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1980, the
tend
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trend
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is
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changed and
mostly
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most
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 people as much as 25% either
going
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went
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 to work
and
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or
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travel
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travelling
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 by using public transport. In the
millenials
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millennials
, the transportation trends move into
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the vehicle
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vehicle
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vehicles
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,
nearly
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with nearly
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 35%
pupils
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of pupils
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 using
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a car
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car
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cars
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,
following
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followed
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 by bus in around 15%.
to conclude
,
European's
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Europe's
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 civil interest in transportation
mode
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modes
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 constantly
changes
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changed
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 during the period.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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