The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table represents
last
year's
time
spent by the UK's unemployed people.
Overall
, women spent most of the
time
on housework either in the morning or
afternoon
.
On the other hand
,
men
spent most of the morning
time
on job hunting,
while
in the
afternoon
, spent ,mostly on watching TV or gardening. Looking at the data of the
last
year,
men
consumed almost 22% of their
time
in the morning and 12% in the
afternoon
for job hunting. They
also
spent 19% of their
time
contributing to the housework
while
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20% of the
time
doing shopping. There are other categories too but the least
time
men
spent on drinking,
that is
%5 of the total, and above that 8% each on physical activities and staying in bed.
On the other hand
, women spent almost 70% of the total
time
doing housework,
that is
49% in the morning and 21% in the
afternoon
. Apart from that, they spent 43% of the total
for
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shopping and 27%
for
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visiting friends or relatives. They did not
spent
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spend
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any
time
to stay
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staying
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in bed in the
afternoon
compared to
men
. The
least
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last
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time
they spent drinking is a total of 2%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, on the other hand, that is, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, afternoon, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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