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The bar graph above shows average earnings in the Republic of Ireland in 5 different years, with projections for the future. Earnings are in US dollars.

The bar graph above shows average earnings in the Republic of Ireland in 5 different years, with projections for the future. Earnings are in US dollars.
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The bar chart displays the average wages in the Republic of Ireland between 1968 to 2018, with
prediction
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 for the upcoming year,
in addition
, the unit of
this
 bar chart is US dollars.
Overall
, the trend of the level of
paid
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 in
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Ireland has increased
in
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every ten years except for the mild decrease in 2008, and it had the most significant growth in the next decade. The wages started at slightly below 8,000 in 1968, during the next 30 years, the salaries increased steadily,
it
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 grew around 2,000 to 3,000 in each decade, and the
paid
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 in
these period
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were
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 10,000, 13,000 and 15,000. The only notable exception is the drop in 2008, which was about 1,000 lower than the number in 1998,
in contrast
, there was a significant increase in
next
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the next
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 decade which had
a
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nearly 4,000
of growing
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 in 2018.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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