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The charts show the sources of electricity produced 4 countries between 2003 and 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featuras. and make comparisons where comparisons where relevant

The charts show the sources of electricity produced 4 countries between 2003 and 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featuras. and make comparisons where comparisons where relevant
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the charts illustrate the comparison of different sources of
electricity
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 from 4 nations from 2003 until 2008.
overall
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, Morocco is the only country that relies fully on using hydropower as their main
sources
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source
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 of
electricity
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. as
it
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apply
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can be seen, Morocco produced their
electricity
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 mostly on hydropower, followed by Sweden and Vietnam, these 2 countries took up roughly 50% respectively
while
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 India has the
least
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lowest
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 percentage with only 15%.
In contrast
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, India led the number
on
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in
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fossil
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the fossil
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 fuel section with 82%, Vietnam coming second at 56%,
Morocco
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and Morocco
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 and Sweden using
the
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a
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 similar amount
on
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of
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 fossil with around 5%. In comparison with Vietnam, Sweden obviously has the highest number on using nuclear power as their source of
electricity
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besides
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 hydropower, standing at 44%. there were only 2 countries that utilised nuclear power, the other country is India,
also
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 using their nuclear power for
electricity
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although
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 they only used 4% of their total proportions
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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