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The chart and graph give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lectuer describing the information shown below.

The chart and graph give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola. Write a report for a university lectuer describing the information shown below.
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The pie chart and line graph depict the
volume
 of
Coca-cola
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Coca-Cola
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 sold around the world and the
stock
 prices, respectively. It is clear from the pie chart that North
America
 has the
most
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highest
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 percentage sold, and the
stock
 prices are fluctuating as the years pass.
According to
 what is shown, the total
volume
 of
Coca-cola
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Coca-Cola
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 that was produced around the world is 17.1 billion
unit
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units
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volume
.
In addition
,
this
volume
 is distributed as the following, North
America
 with the highest percentage with 30.4%, Latin
America
 with 25.7, Europe with 20.5, Asia with 16.4, and
finally
, Africa and the Middle East with the lowest percentage. The
stock
 price started in 1996
with
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at
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 only about 32
dollars
 per share, and since
then
 it showed a sharp increase
untill
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until
 it reached its peak in 1998
with
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at
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 about 80
dollars
 per
stock
, unfortunately, the
stock
 experienced a dramatic decrease in
it
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its
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 price
,
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 until it reached its final price with only about 60
dollars
 per share in 2000.
To sum up
, we could say that the
stock
 prices reached
its
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their
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 peak in 1998
with
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at
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 80
dollars
 per share and the highest consumers of
Coca-cola
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Coca-Cola
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 are in North
America
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words volume, stock, america, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • illustrate
  • highlight
  • fluctuations
  • correlation
  • trends
  • overview
  • analysis
  • interpretation
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