The chart below shows the oercentage of household in owned and rented in accommodation in Englan and Wales between 1918 and 2011

The chart below shows the oercentage of household in owned and rented in accommodation in Englan and Wales between 1918 and 2011
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The bar chart portrays the proportion of families who have their own house and choose to rent accommodation in two countries (England and Wales) from 1918 to 2011.
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of renting a property steadily
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in the first period, but the trend continued to decrease until 2011.Meanwhile, having a house as an owner was in reverse during the period. Looking into details, the graph shows the figure of families who had leased accommodation in two cities amounted to almost 80% in 1918. The rate witnessed a decrease, dropping to under 70% in 1939 and 1953.
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experienced a fall until 2001 at around 30% and the rate rose again in a small proportion yet reached 40%.
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, there were just over 20% accounted for families deciding to buy property in the first period. In the following years, the
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gradually increased from 1939 and peaked in 2001 at nearly 70%.
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, ten years later, the proportion in
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type had reduced at a minute rate yet the
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was still higher than other groups.
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