Governments should spend money on rai/ways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In
several years, Change preposition
For
Indonesian
government Add an article
the Indonesian
was
focused on building public infrastructure like water Wrong verb form
has been
irrigations
, dams, bridges, roads, housing areas, and the newest public Fix the agreement mistake
irrigation
transportasion
Correct your spelling
transportation
high speed
train (KCJB). In my Add a hyphen
high-speed
opinion
it was Add a comma
opinion,
good
idea to Change the article
a good
built
more railways station because of some reasons like:
Change the form of the verb
build
First,
more public Linking Words
transportation
like a train that can Use synonyms
be reaching
rural areas means more equality in Wrong verb form
reach
Inodenesia
. Of Correct your spelling
Indonesia
course
Add a comma
course,
this
was good to show that Indonesia has good facilities as in developed country. And Linking Words
then
everyone Linking Words
were
being happy to feel the same Change the verb form
was
of
opportunities.
Change preposition
apply
Secondly
, Linking Words
this
Linking Words
also
can Linking Words
reduces
the traffic jams, as we know so many vehicles on the road in rush hours. At the same time, the pollution from residual vehicle Change the verb form
reduce
emmisions
can be reduced too. No more people are getting mad because tired Correct your spelling
emissions
driving
so long on Change preposition
of driving
weekday
. Fix the agreement mistake
weekdays
This
has a good impact both on physical and mental health.
Well, using public Linking Words
transportation
is cheaper than Use synonyms
use
your own vehicle. So we can Wrong verb form
using
allocated
the money for other needs like healthcare, Change the verb form
allocate
be allocated
selfcare
, investment, Correct your spelling
self-care
self care
went
for a holiday, and so on.
And I think road construction Wrong verb form
going
was
continuous development because over Wrong verb form
is
a
time the road will be broken again, so it’s better to build Correct article usage
apply
a
public Remove the article
apply
transportation
first Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
a
train. Change preposition
as a
This
can be an alternative Linking Words
transportation
if the roads are damaged.
Use synonyms
Overall
, Linking Words
this
can be comfortable and lasts a long time if the good facilities are followed by the good maintenance. The government has spent a lot of money Linking Words
for built
the railway, Change preposition
to build
our
task as users is to contribute Correct word choice
and our
maintaining
public facilities.Change preposition
to maintaining
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