Governments should spend money on rai/ways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In
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several years,
Indonesian
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the Indonesian
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government
was
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focused on building public infrastructure like water
irrigations
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irrigation
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, dams, bridges, roads, housing areas, and the newest public
transportasion
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transportation
high speed
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train (KCJB). In my
opinion
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opinion,
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it was
good
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a good
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idea to
built
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more railways station because of some reasons like:
First,
more public
transportation
like a train that can
be reaching
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reach
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rural areas means more equality in
Inodenesia
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Indonesia
. Of
course
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course,
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this
was good to show that Indonesia has good facilities as in developed country. And
then
everyone
were
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being happy to feel the same
of
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opportunities.
Secondly
,
this
also
can
reduces
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the traffic jams, as we know so many vehicles on the road in rush hours. At the same time, the pollution from residual vehicle
emmisions
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emissions
can be reduced too. No more people are getting mad because tired
driving
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of driving
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so long on
weekday
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.
This
has a good impact both on physical and mental health. Well, using public
transportation
is cheaper than
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your own vehicle. So we can
allocated
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the money for other needs like healthcare,
selfcare
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self-care
self care
, investment,
went
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for a holiday, and so on. And I think road construction
was
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continuous development because over
a
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time the road will be broken again, so it’s better to build
a
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public
transportation
first
such
a
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as a
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train.
This
can be an alternative
transportation
if the roads are damaged.
Overall
,
this
can be comfortable and lasts a long time if the good facilities are followed by the good maintenance. The government has spent a lot of money
for built
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the railway,
our
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and our
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task as users is to contribute
maintaining
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to maintaining
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public facilities.
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