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The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009

The bar chart below shows the number of houses built per year in two cities, Derby and Nottingham, Between 2000 and 2009
The vertical bar charts give
data
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 about the comparison between
Derby
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 and
Nottingham
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 from 2000 until 2009. The
value
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 of
data
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 is summarised of
houses
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 developed. In general, the picture shows fluctuating
data
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 from 2000 until 2009. The larger number of
houses
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 in
Derby
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 in 2009.
Moreover
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,
Nottingham
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 had the lowest
value
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 of developed homes in 2008. Regarding fluctuating
data
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, we can see an increasing
value
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 of
houses
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 in
Derby
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 from approximately 40
houses
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 in 2000.
Furthermore
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, In 2009 number of developed
houses
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 reached more than 300
houses
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 per year.
Besides
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, the
value
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 of developed
houses
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 from 2003 until 2007
Derby
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 had a constant
value
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 of approximately 110 developed
houses
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 per year. In terms of building
houses
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 in
Nottingham
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 had more fluctuating from 2000 until 2009. Meanwhile, the majority
value
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 of
houses
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 each year is under 100
houses
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, except in 2007 and 2009.
In contrast
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, the highest number of
houses
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 in
Nottingham
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 was in 2009, when approximately 240
houses
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 were developed.
On the other hand
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, the lowest rate of building in
Nottingham
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 was in 2006 when approximately 10
houses
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 were developed.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words data, derby, nottingham, value, houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • number of houses built
  • per year
  • cities
  • Derby
  • Nottingham
  • between
  • comparison
  • 10-year period
  • year-wise
  • analyze
  • compare
  • total
  • over
  • closing statement
  • introduction
  • overview
  • summarize
  • main points
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