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The media has become too influential in people’s lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#media #people’s #lives #development
There is no denying the fact that
media
 influence can be an arguable subject.
While it
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 is a commonly held belief
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that
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some individuals believe that today's
media
 has too much power and can influence people’s lives. there is
also
 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that
media
 is a weapon that can be used to change and shape public minds.
To begin
 with, One of the biggest problems with
media
 that it is can shape public
opninon
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opinion
.
In other words
, it can be used to sway perspectives on politics, culture, and societal norms.
In addition
,
media
 can Intrusion into the privacy of individuals' lives.
For example
, it can lead to invasions of personal space and erosion of privacy. Another point to consider is that social
media
 nowadays has an impact on mental health. It is
also
 possible to say that, the effects of Cyberbullying on psychological well-being and social
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.
Moreover
, social
media
 can empower the marginalized.
For instance
, it gives them a voice and they can promote social change. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that I tend that
media
 nowadays has a negative impact and it needs regulation and strict rules, I suggest that governments put a plan on how to improve
media
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influential
  • negative development
  • opinions
  • perceptions
  • unrealistic standards
  • ideals
  • manipulate
  • distort
  • information
  • addiction
  • dependency
  • privacy
  • valuable
  • entertainment
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