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what is homelessness? what are the reasons for the homeless people

#homelessness #people
The term 'homeless' refers to the
people
 who lost loss their homes, whatever the reason was. Most
people
 become homeless
due to
 the bad gathering of friends. Some lost their homes because of
lost
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their job or
due to
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the lost
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lost
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of everything in
gamble
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 whether their home, assets
and
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or
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 even wife as well . Homeless
people
 's lifestyles vary
country
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 to
country
 . In poor countries
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they do rigorous struggle to get food as compared to rich countries . I've seen many homeless
people
 who depend on
government
 shelters
also
they
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start begging to
fulfill
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 their will of drugs. Developed countries provide them food for
entire
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an entire
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 month
along with
 some cash on
monthly
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 basis in order to control robbery and unemployment.
Furthermore
 , homeless
people
 directly impact on
country
's
economy
 .
As they
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 do not work for their livelihood and
also
 do not contribute
in
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 the
government
 's
economy
 even
they
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though they
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 live in
country
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the country
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 but not
include
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 in the
country
's official counting
ofthe
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of the
population. That's how they
also
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 free from paying taxes.
Government
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make plans,
according to
 registered data, but plans get disturbed
due to
 these types of
people
 .
Apart from
this
, robberies
also
increasealso
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increase also
increases
increaseing
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increasing
because if they yearn for drugs they do illicit acts. On the whole ,
government
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 should prepare a proper plan for homeless
people
 and emphasis them to do some kind of work to afford their selves. That's how
country's
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economy
 can rise and unemployment
get
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lessens. If
government
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the government
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 doesn't do the same,
they
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it
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 will be harmful
for
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to
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economy
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the economy
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 and the peace of the
country
 .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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