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Newspapers have an enormous influence on people’s opinions and ideas. Do you think it is a positive or negative situation

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It is an undeniable fact that
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newspapers
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source
 for reporting all the happening in the world. In
this
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Newspapers
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 they are negative. The major reason is that
newspapers
 have been the largest news of
information
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in the world. In
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 it can be used as a guide to hike preventive actions needed.
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, during the time of covid pandemic.
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COVID-19
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 getting published daily in the
newspaper
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Therefore
,
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 is the
source
 of
information
 over the globe.
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 major reason is that people get jobs through the
newspaper
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 about the number of job vacancies available.
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 through adverse in
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 out that students can get know about jobs and different scholarship schemes available for them.
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, it is
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source
 for people to get
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jobs.
On the other hand
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others
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 argue that
newspaper
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newspapers
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 can give false
information
.
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In fact
, they keep the politicians as
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 major headline.
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, they take money from the politicians and give their false
information
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 a negative impact on
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. In conclusion,
newspapers
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source
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 that it is
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positive
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humans.
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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • opinions
  • perspectives
  • crucial
  • informing
  • educating
  • biased
  • sensationalized
  • shape
  • attitudes
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