Governments should spend money on rail/ways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
I believe the good developing countries can see from the infrastructures, the statement says the
government
needs spare Use synonyms
money
for Use synonyms
railways
rather than Use synonyms
roads
. I fully not really agree with Use synonyms
this
statement because the Linking Words
government
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also
needs to spend Linking Words
money
on other subjects Use synonyms
such
as Linking Words
roads
not only on Use synonyms
railways
. In my opinion, two aspects are the most important for the Use synonyms
transportation
sector because it can be helpful to make people quickly arrive at their purpose.
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Firstly
, in Linking Words
this
essay, I will explain when the Linking Words
government
only focused on Use synonyms
railways
. We know that Use synonyms
railways
are good public Use synonyms
transport
because the train is very quick rather Use synonyms
than
other public Change preposition
to
transport
. Use synonyms
For example
, when the Linking Words
railways
are limited, In my mind, it can be the same with other public Use synonyms
transport
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, when some people need to Linking Words
quick
arrive at the office or school because the railway station is crowded it can be a trap for some people.
Rephrase
apply
Secondly
, In my Linking Words
argue
about the statement, I prefer to develop other Replace the word
argument
transportation
ways. Use synonyms
In addition
, In my countries have Linking Words
much
Change the quantifier
many
roads
in bad condition. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, when the Linking Words
government
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also
gives to spend Linking Words
money
for Use synonyms
roads
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also
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can be
helps for alternative public Verb problem
apply
transport
Use synonyms
such
as buses. Linking Words
For example
, when the Linking Words
government
have a good distribution for Use synonyms
spend
Replace the word
spending
money
, I guess the bus can be another choice for way public Use synonyms
transport
because some student Use synonyms
use
the bus for Change the verb form
uses
transport
to Use synonyms
going
to school. In Wrong verb form
go
cases
, some students can be late when the Correct quantifier usage
some cases
roads
Use synonyms
in
bad condition because damaged Add a missing verb
are in
roads
will Use synonyms
be have
Change the verb form
have
any
accidents.
Correct quantifier usage
apply
To conclude
, developing countries can be checked based on infrastructure. Linking Words
Use synonyms
Government
can be spending Correct article usage
The government
money
Use synonyms
for
Change preposition
on
infrastructures
, especially Fix the agreement mistake
infrastructure
in
Change preposition
on
railways
or Use synonyms
roads
. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, when the Linking Words
government
only Use synonyms
focused
Wrong verb form
focuses
in
one way it can Change preposition
on
be
trap Unnecessary verb
apply
transportation
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, Linking Words
Use synonyms
government
should Add an article
the government
be
spend Unnecessary verb
apply
money
to plan Use synonyms
others
public Correct quantifier usage
other
transportation
to provide public Use synonyms
transportation
.Use synonyms
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