Governments should spend money on rail/ways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
I believe the good developing countries can see from the infrastructures, the statement says the
government
needs spare money
for railways
rather than roads
. I fully not really agree with this
statement because the government
also
needs to spend money
on other subjects such
as roads
not only on railways
. In my opinion, two aspects are the most important for the transportation
sector because it can be helpful to make people quickly arrive at their purpose.
Firstly
, in this
essay, I will explain when the government
only focused on railways
. We know that railways
are good public transport
because the train is very quick rather than
other public Change preposition
to
transport
. For example
, when the railways
are limited, In my mind, it can be the same with other public transport
. Moreover
, when some people need to quick
arrive at the office or school because the railway station is crowded it can be a trap for some people.
Rephrase
apply
Secondly
, In my argue
about the statement, I prefer to develop other Replace the word
argument
transportation
ways. In addition
, In my countries have much
Change the quantifier
many
roads
in bad condition. Furthermore
, when the government
also
gives to spend money
for roads
also
can be
helps for alternative public Verb problem
apply
transport
such
as buses. For example
, when the government
have a good distribution for spend
Replace the word
spending
money
, I guess the bus can be another choice for way public transport
because some student use
the bus for Change the verb form
uses
transport
to going
to school. In Wrong verb form
go
cases
, some students can be late when the Correct quantifier usage
some cases
roads
in
bad condition because damaged Add a missing verb
are in
roads
will be have
Change the verb form
have
any
accidents.
Correct quantifier usage
apply
To conclude
, developing countries can be checked based on infrastructure. Government
can be spending Correct article usage
The government
money
for
Change preposition
on
infrastructures
, especially Fix the agreement mistake
infrastructure
in
Change preposition
on
railways
or roads
. Furthermore
, when the government
only focused
Wrong verb form
focuses
in
one way it can Change preposition
on
be
trap Unnecessary verb
apply
transportation
. Moreover
, government
should Add an article
the government
be
spend Unnecessary verb
apply
money
to plan others
public Correct quantifier usage
other
transportation
to provide public transportation
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