The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps depict how the floor of Central Library changed between twenty years ago and now. From an
overall
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perspective, it is
edvient
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evident
that
the
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every area's topic and main
funtions
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functions
had
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changed.
Futurmore
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,
space
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around
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the enterance
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enterance
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entrance
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was became
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was become
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more space, there
are
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more
electornic equitment
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electronic equipment
replace
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the enterancemant blocks. Looking more closely at the figures, the rooms
in
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this
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floor
was
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were
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devided
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divided
by different ages of group in 20 years ago.
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, the room
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in
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right up was for
child
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children
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,
teenager
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teenagers
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might go left
cause
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the room only
includ
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includes
CDs, videos,
computer
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and computer
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games.
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, every kind of
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target
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adult
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adults
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was put
in
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walkspace
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walk space
workspace
,
also
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had tables and
chaire
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chairs
chair
offer people to discuss. After development, the way of
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different areas is
funtion
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function
in now. Significantly, the plan
add
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adds
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several types of rooms, like only for
lecture
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lectures
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,
comuter
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computer
commuter
and
cafeshop
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cafe shop
.
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, the plan
also
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placed the new technology stuff like self-service machines.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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