The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates some information regarding the
quantity
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number
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of people coming to
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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Island
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Islands
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for holidays from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, the total
number
of tourists visiting the place rose significantly and visitors staying on cruise ships
were
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apply
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also
rise
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rose
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from the middle of the period.
Whereas
, tourists staying on
Island
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the Island
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experienced a fluctuation trend. In detail, the sum of people coming to the
island
was 1
million
in 2010.
Then
it
was increasing
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increased
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steadily until 2015 approximately 2.8
million
. After 2016 it rapidly went up and reached 3.5
million
in 2017. Visitors staying on cruise
ship
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ships
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was about .3
million
in the
year
2010. In 2011 the people coming was nearly multiplied and in the next
year
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year,
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it went down to nearly .3
million
. After 2012 the tourist
number
showed an upward trend until 2017 about
2million
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2 million
.
In contrast
, visitors staying
in
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on
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Island
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the Island
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had a fluctuating trend
though out
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throughout
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the 8 years. In 2101 it was .7
million
and there
was
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were
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not any changes in the
number
in the following
year
.
However
, later from the graph it
apparent
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is apparent
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that slowly going up to 1.5
million
in 2015. From there the amount of individuals coming to see the place has reduced. But in the final
year
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year,
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the
number
was again increased.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, number, million, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tourists
  • Caribbean
  • Visit
  • Graph
  • Summarize
  • Trend
  • Fluctuate
  • Peak season
  • Anomalies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparisons
  • Sector
  • Significant
  • Patterns
  • Overview
  • Analyze
  • Data
  • Year-on-year
  • Percentage
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