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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates some information regarding the
quantity
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number
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 of people coming to
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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Island
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Islands
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 for holidays from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of tourists visiting the place rose significantly and visitors staying on cruise ships
were
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apply
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also
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rise
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rose
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 from the middle of the period.
Whereas
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, tourists staying on
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Island
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the Island
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 experienced a fluctuation trend. In detail, the sum of people coming to the
island
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 was 1
million
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 in 2010.
Then
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 it
was increasing
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increased
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 steadily until 2015 approximately 2.8
million
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. After 2016 it rapidly went up and reached 3.5
million
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 in 2017. Visitors staying on cruise
ship
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ships
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 was about .3
million
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 in the
year
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 2010. In 2011 the people coming was nearly multiplied and in the next
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year
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year,
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 it went down to nearly .3
million
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. After 2012 the tourist
number
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 showed an upward trend until 2017 about
2million
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2 million
.
In contrast
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, visitors staying
in
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on
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Island
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the Island
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 had a fluctuating trend
though out
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throughout
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 the 8 years. In 2101 it was .7
million
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 and there
was
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were
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 not any changes in the
number
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 in the following
year
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.
However
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, later from the graph it
apparent
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is apparent
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 that slowly going up to 1.5
million
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 in 2015. From there the amount of individuals coming to see the place has reduced. But in the final
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year
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year,
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 the
number
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 was again increased.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, number, million, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tourists
  • Caribbean
  • Visit
  • Graph
  • Summarize
  • Trend
  • Fluctuate
  • Peak season
  • Anomalies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparisons
  • Sector
  • Significant
  • Patterns
  • Overview
  • Analyze
  • Data
  • Year-on-year
  • Percentage
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