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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Today, in most nations,
food
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 from the whole world can be bought in a supermarket. To buy or not to buy,
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, I personally believe that can bring many benefits to us, and I will explain why in the following paragraphs. To start with, I have been to many countries, and there are some foods I like, but I can not eat in Taiwan.
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, I really hope one day I can have a chance to taste it again. There are many delicious dishes on the earth.
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, most people never tried them before, because not that they are aware of them. By introducing them, they could have opportunities to eat them. It will be a good business for companies to make. Another point I would like to mention is the quantity and quality. Take Australia
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, I believe the steak and beef from there are much better than those made in Taiwan. The prices of certain fruits or vegetables in some countries are very cheap.
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, we can spend less money on them, and it can help us to save lots of money. In my opinion,
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 can enrich our lives. In a nutshell, importing
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 from other places is the idea I am supporting
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because
food
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 from other continents can be eaten by us. There is no need for people to travel overseas to give it a try.
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, some regions may be the main source countries for particular types of
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. If we import them into our homeland, it
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 reduce our cost of living.

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Task Achievement
The essay presents a clear and well-structured response to the task, directly addressing whether the global availability of food is a positive development.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present and clearly highlight the main argument, providing a cohesive start and finish to the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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