The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2020.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart depicts the figures for men and women working as tutors in six district categories of educational stages in Britain in 2010. As can be seen, the majority of women teachers were in charge of early educational settings,
while
in the latter levels, men constituted much more proportion. In detail, the
figure
for female tutors dominated
the
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nursery and primary
schools
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education, being over 95% and 90% respectively. As for the junior high school setting, the
figure
for ladies took up about 55%, being slightly higher than the opposite sex who accounted for 45%. Turning
on
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the
further
educational stages, in
case
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of college, both figures witnessed
the
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equal percentage of teachers from both genders, taking up 50% each.
In contrast
to the former figures, the proportion of lectures in
two
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highest levels of education
were
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dominated by men. The
figure
for male teachers in charge of private training institute
were
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over
the
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half
while
in the university stage,
this
figure
constituted even higher, at approximately 70%
comparing
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to the
figure
for female tutors
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30%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • educational settings
  • primary
  • secondary
  • tertiary
  • adult education
  • vocational training
  • private tutoring
  • disparity
  • dominate
  • majority
  • minority
  • gender distribution
  • workforce
  • trend
  • ratio
  • comparative analysis
  • significant difference
  • visual representation
  • data interpretation
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