The bar chart below shows the different types of accommodation chosen by the British when they on holiday in 2010

The bar chart below shows the different types of accommodation chosen by the British when they on holiday in 2010
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The given bar chart illustrates four types of accommodation preferred by British
people
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for their vacation during 2010.
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,
people
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from England, Scotland, Wales and Northern Ireland preferred hotels most,
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caravan and camping were the least preferred places to stay. Even though a significant number of individuals from each country choose self-catering as their accommodation. The highest number of tourists from each place wished to stay at hotels
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among other regions England recorded as the top at around 55%.
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, North Ireland travellers chose hotels roughly 45% of which was lower than other
people
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.
In contrast
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, the caravan was liked by them at 30% which is higher comparatively.
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move on the second highest choice was self-catering which dominated in three countries at around 30% except Northern Irelan which recorded nearly 15%.
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, in almost every mentioned state traveller the least preferred facility was camping. Because in Scotland less than 10% of
people
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chose to stay
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other states visitors chose about 10 to 15%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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