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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part-time.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part-time.
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The chart illustrates the average of men and women in high-level education in the United Kingdom in three decades and whether they were full-time
students
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 or part-time.
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, it is clearly seen that over three periods,
students
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 in the UK tend to take a full semester of studying rather than half, and
this
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 occasion applies to both female and male
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.
To begin
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 with, in the first era of 1970 to 1971, the education institute was mainly filled by men, with the
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 1000 for full-time
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,
this
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number
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 is higher than female
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 with only about 750
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. Compared to part-time
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, the
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 is totally low, it was only 150-190
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.
This
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 same situation happened until the 80s.
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, the condition was reversed in 1990. The full-time
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 were dominated by females. There was an increased
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, which was 1150
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,
while
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 the male
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 were only 950. The rise up phenomenon
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 happened to part-time
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, previously in the beginning there were only an average of 100
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, but in the 90s, it increased to 190-200.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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