The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full time or part-time.

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The chart illustrates the average of men and women in high-level education in the United Kingdom in three decades and whether they were full-time

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or part-time.

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, it is clearly seen that over three periods,

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in the UK tend to take a full semester of studying rather than half, and

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occasion applies to both female and male

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with, in the first era of 1970 to 1971, the education institute was mainly filled by men, with the

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1000 for full-time

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is higher than female

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with only about 750

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. Compared to part-time

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, the

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is totally low, it was only 150-190

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same situation happened until the 80s.

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, the condition was reversed in 1990. The full-time

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were dominated by females. There was an increased

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, which was 1150

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the male

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were only 950. The rise up phenomenon

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happened to part-time

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, previously in the beginning there were only an average of 100

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, but in the 90s, it increased to 190-200.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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