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Today, many people do not know thier neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this ?

Nowadays, many
family
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families
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 who live in big cities don'
t
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 know and meet
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thier
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their neighbours
neigbours
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 rarely.
This
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all
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 because
the
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 internet and the
separate
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 from
people
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 to
people
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 in
community
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the community
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.
This
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writter
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writer
 will give you more information about what
reason
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this problems
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these problems
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 and give you the best solution for
this
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. Starting with the main
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that
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 was
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the internet
an internet
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internet
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, which is very
popuplar
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popular
 now in the world. And because of it
appear
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,
people
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 don'
t
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 talk with each other much in real life,
make
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making
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 them
loss
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thier
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their
 confidence and the skill to talk with
people
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 .From that citizens now get separate and get shy when they talk with
other person
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another person
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,
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so that they won'
t
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 know
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thier
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their
 neighbours in
large
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a large
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 city.
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, the next
reason
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 that
make
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made
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this
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cause
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case
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 was
about
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the
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their
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 attitude from them.Because they are envious and get cross with
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thier
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their
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neigbours
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neighbours
 so that they will lead a negative effect
to
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on
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 that family and make them turn into
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thier
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their
 parents. Come up with the other important
reason
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 that
make
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makes
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people
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t
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 know
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thier
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their
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neigbours
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neighbours
 in large cities was about
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thier schedude
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their schedule
 and
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thier
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their
work
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 time
in
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 that day.
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, if
people
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work
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form
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from
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 six to twelve am and one
people
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work
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 from twelve to five pm .I'm sure they will never meet each other because
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thier
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their
work
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time
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times
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 are different. What is more , if there
was
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were
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 one
problems
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problem
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 like covid-19,
people
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 would get stuck in
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thier
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their
 home and
this
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 can be one of the
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reason
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reasons
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 that makes
them
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they
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 don'
t
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 know about
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thier
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their
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neigbours
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neighbours
 in
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thier
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their
neigbourhood
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neighbourhood
. In my opinion, there are a lot of different
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reason
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reasons
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 that make
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this problems
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this problem
these problems
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. But the main solution that
i
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I
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 can give
for
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you
that was
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is to
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 use the
internet
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Internet
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 less
down
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apply
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. Practise to
communitcate
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communicate
 with your
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neigbours
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neighbours
 and
sometime
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some time
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 hang out with them,
this
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 will help you a lot in
know
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knowing
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 more about each other and get more confidence to talk with
people
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 in real life.
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contrast
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 if
people
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work
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thier
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their
 own, don'
t
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 know about
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thier
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their
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neigbours
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neighbours
,
people
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 will get shy and lose
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thier
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their
 skill and can separate
people
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 and turn
this
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 community become
more
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apply
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worse . So as
the
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apply
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real neighbours ,
i
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I
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 think you should know more and
sometime
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sometimes
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 talk with your neighbours so that it can make
people
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more happy
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happier
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 about each other.

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